:Aue Te Maroke Hoki! — A Better Story
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Approach:  Station  
Focus:  Making a story more vivid and exciting.
Resources: Picture.
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Questions/instructions:
Here is the start of a story about a boat. It is not very exciting.
Änei te tïmatanga o tëtahi pakiwaitara mö tëtahi waka. Aue te maroke hoki!
Ka puta te äwhä. Ka kite waka ahau. Kei runga i te moana.

There was a storm. I saw a boat. It was on the sea.

Write a more exciting start to the story about the boat in a storm.
Only write the first 2 or 3 sentences of the story.

Nä te maroke o tënei tïmatanga pakiwaitara, mäu anö e tuhi i tëtahi kia tino pai ake.
Tuhia anö kia rua, toru ränei ngä rerenga körero mö të tïmatanga.

% responses
Ged
MI
start mentions a storm
73
37
start mentions a boat (not ship, tugboat, fishing vessel)
81
86
start mentions the sea (not lake, ocean)
41
63
start mentions the storm making the sea rough
42
57
start mentions the storm/rough sea putting boat at risk
48
50
Overall, how exciting is the start? 
very dramatic
0
2
quite dramatic
19
9
a little dramatic
48
34
dull
33
55
 
Total score:
7–8
7
5
5–6
26
20
3–4
41
50
0–2
26
25
Commentary:
The results achieved by Mäori students in general education (GEd) settings and students in Mäori immersion (MI) settings were not statistically significantly different.
MÄORI IMMERSION STUDENTS’ EXAMPLES:
Ko te hau tawhiri i pukeria ngaru tuatea hautawhiri i puoro hu tai akina kominomino mai te moana ki te waka. I haere etahi tangäta ki te moana pea rua haora ai rätou e haerere ana, ä, ka haere ai rätou I te moana. I mate te nuinga o ngä tangäta.
Ka tino pupuhi te hau ka tino kaha te ua a kua puta mai he äwha. E kite ana au i tetëhi poti e rerere ana i runga i te moana. Aue te mataku hoki o tenei pikitia. Ko te tumanako he pai tënei rä. (Kei runga te waka) He karere tënei ka puta mai te äwha. Aue ta taka porepore ta matou waka.
Awha karaurira, waka kitea e au i Runga ngä pari tae o Tangaroa.
 I tëtahi rä i haere wenei tangata i runga i te moana me tä ratou waka tino pai, engari, I timata nga uira me te ua wera mea kino, ka tino mataku ratou ka hau mai wetahi ngaru nui ka ngaro te waka ka mate nga tangata.
Aue te ngaru o tangaroa e pupuhi ana I runga to matau nei waka moana.
Ka piki ngä ngaru, ka hinga te poti, aii!! te mataku hoki.
 
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